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"Jackie"


Author: Magger32
ASL Info:    18-female-PA.
Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 53 /131 /124
Words: 78
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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someone who will not let me KNOW them at all. She wont even look me in the eyes because all her emotions are hidden in her eyes.


"Jackie"



She's different,
Her hair is short,
She is as tough as a nail,
Her temper rises quickly,
but her kindness will always prevail,
Her name is short,
Her eyes a deep brownish gold,
Her story is complicated,
She'll never get old,
Her kindness yet her wish to succeed,
Always in the strangest ways surprises me,
Her name is Jackie,
Or jacklyn,
I just wish she'd show someone,
even if it isn't me,
What lies within.





Submitted on 2007-06-23 10:52:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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