"Jackie"

Author: Magger32 ASL Info:    18-female-PA. Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 53 /131 /124 Words: 78

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"Jackie"

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She's different, Her hair is short, She is as tough as a nail, Her temper rises quickly, but her kindness will always prevail, Her name is short, Her eyes a deep brownish gold, Her story is complicated, She'll never get old, Her kindness yet her wish to succeed, Always in the strangest ways surprises me, Her name is Jackie, Or jacklyn, I just wish she'd show someone, even if it isn't me, What lies within.

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