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    dots Submission Name: The Last Crusaderdots
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    Author: Seraphim X
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 32/41/33
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1166
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    dotsThe Last Crusaderdots
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    My heart swollen with blood and passion
    Rides the waves of chaos and destruction
    My wings dark as the starless sky
    I rest among bodies veiled red dye
    With no dream granted to my mind
    I am lost as the last of my kind

    Tears shed in my soulís chasm
    Screams in the still phantom
    Fires that burn the blood to boil
    Consumes those resting in the soil
    The sunset takes the last light into extinction
    A hallow night to the wraith of retribution




    Submitted on 2007-06-23 13:31:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Strikes me as a cross between a sonnet and free verse war poetry. I've never seen this before I have no idea where the previous statement came from, I just felt it that way.
    'the words are large, but the heart aches for more.'

    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-07-14 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      ~*~

    I am not at complete loss of words. I have just enough to say that this is something of likeness which I have been waiting for. A favorite at best. Your poetry is miraculous and I ask of you to keep doing the splendid job because I can see that fantasy is an excellent genre for your writing style. I enjoyed this thoroughly. The rhyming was done like a charm.

    ~*~

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    | Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      this hits a little close to home. I'll give you a better comment a little later after i have time to think on it.
    | Posted on 2007-06-24 00:00:00 | by nomad knight | [ Reply to This ]


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