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    dots Submission Name: Vending Machinedots

    Author: leper messiah
    ASL Info:    21~f~New England
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 197/249/38
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       another one from the vaults...i don't have a lot of time, gotta run, no time, no time, I'm late i'm late i'm late...Clean cup, move down...! sorry, little Mad Hatter for ya...anyhow, this was in a mood while i was chillin to Ani again, so it was supposed to be just angry or sad girl music like i was feelin somethin...it was kinda fun to write. i know some lines don't fit too well with others, that's about all i should warn for. suggestions welcome. Latah~ april

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    dotsVending Machinedots

    You keep handing me these bottles
    Like its time to fill the vending machine again
    Stand staring at the bottom,
    Where some sticky mess needs to be cleaned
    And I'm not even real sure, from the people
    that are stalkin around the store,
    If someday, when I'm thirsty, I'll be this close
    to you anymore...
    You keep lining up those bottle caps
    Cuz you say you got nothin else to do
    Up here on the top bottle rack
    The tinted plastic makes you look like you
    are so blue
    But I can tell that I'm all shaken up,
    Like the foam that dances the rim of
    your cup,
    That someday, I'll come down again,
    Make you feel like your 'hyper' was just a bluff...
    You kept organizing rows of us
    Like its an adamant part of your day
    I know how you hate impulse,
    But your boredom's bound to lead you astray...
    From the top shelf of this machine, all the
    Bottles topple and roll to the screen,
    And laying down, we looked around, and
    laughed at being in everyone's way...

    Submitted on 2004-06-17 09:31:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      your lyrics are very unique.. very professional..i can definitely see the Ani influence in this one. isnt she amazing? i love listening to her talk in concerts before she starts a song..

    anyway.. this one also has a bit of a fiona apple style to it.. sort of in the same vein of 'paper bag' with the imagery.

    i loved the second verse.. especially the last four lines.

    arent you going to post anything new anytime soon?
    | Posted on 2004-07-30 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this piece ^.^ very good actually... Ani is good inspiration *nods* She inspires me to do and write a lot of things. I'd love to hear this put with music... I think it'd be a good song O.O
    | Posted on 2004-06-17 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
      i gotta read this a few times to let it sink in! maybe i'm dense, but i can't figure out if you are a person or the vending machine. it's too early in the morning for me to think straight! i'll read it again. ani always makes me think of my road trip in louisiana with the band "final girl," 'cause we listened to ani in the car all the time! she's great!
    | Posted on 2004-06-17 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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