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    dots Submission Name: i wishdots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsi wishdots
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    i wish i could feel these things i dream.
    the gentleness of your hand wrapped around mine...
    just the thought has me losing my mind.
    the tenderness of your breath on my neck when you hold me...
    has me wishing eternity for you and me.
    the strong comfort of your arms around me after a long day...
    has all my nightmares and fears scattered array.
    the passion in your kiss that makes my heart skip a beat...
    and falling into an abyss of emotions surrounding me in defeat.
    the warm reassurance of your body next to mine as we drift to sleep...
    has me wishing that you were all mine to keep.




    Submitted on 2007-06-24 15:51:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow... i like this piece alot.. one thing i enjoyed the most was that alot of people can relate to it.. i love how its detailed to the point of wanting to feel the breath on your neck as they hold you.. keep up the good work.. n i will read more.

    ~Candy~
    | Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]


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