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    dots Submission Name: Some days I feeldots
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    Author: darkwiccan14
    ASL Info:    15/F/My chair
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 125/125/88
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 99
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1021



    Description:
       How i feel over all the happiness I once had...


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    dotsSome days I feeldots
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    Some days I feel like,
    Chuckinig this whoe life thing,
    Down the drain to where all,
    Useless things go.

    Some days I feel like,
    Who'd care if i were gone,
    Away for ever from this place,
    Cause this city blows.

    Where's everyone I once knew,
    Gone?

    Why haven't I've been able to talk to them,
    As if they were still in this thing I call,
    My life?

    I write this poem,
    As in not as song,
    But as a poem in questions,
    Before the grim comes for me with his shining,
    sife.

    Some days I feel like,
    Feeling chipper and nice,
    Not all this bleak and misery,
    Where it's found in the darkest part,
    Of my heart.

    I've never known that side until this,
    Year when my true ambitions shown,
    And now when I enter the new year,
    I'll have a chance to once again,
    Restart.




    Submitted on 2007-06-24 18:58:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it's pretty good and something i think that many people can relate to. however i think the middle part sounds a little forced. like it was a last minute arrival. you've got talent but you need to let it flow naturally.
    | Posted on 2007-06-25 00:00:00 | by sarcasticmute | [ Reply to This ]



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