I adore this one, very nicely drawn within the lines. However, might I suggest a bit of imagery to flare it up? something alone the lines of:
delerious to whats here or there,
observing whats in front of them,
never to see what lies ahead...
Delerious to what's here or there,
Observing the track before them,
and ignoring the freight train that comes...
See, this imagery gives the reader something to base the write on, when one reads this they imagine someone so consumed with what is right in front of them, that they don't see the problems of the future comming.