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The War On The Ground From The Air

Author: Jose Ragnos
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This is based from an episode of "M*A*S*H*" when a pilot dumped his load when he bailed out of his plane and saw that his bombs landed on a villige of civilians. The pilot never saw the war from the ground, until he saw the little girl on the surgical table.

The War On The Ground From The Air

I saw a little girl in surgery today,
She had burns and shrapnel in her, a tray
Next to the doctor had twigs and metal
Coming from her body, the sight is horrible.

Her face was still yet I see her pain
As my heart will always have this stain.
I could not speak a word other then this:
“Why?” I left the room with no fuss.

I went back to the base and gave my report,
They came to me like I won a sport.
At the debriefing I saw the scene.
Holes and craters like I’ve never seen.

In that picture I saw a girl,
Lying on the ground holding her side.
Taking a closer look I have a shrill
As I saw the little girl, her friends fried.

I was told I would never see the war
That little girl made me crash to the floor.

Submitted on 2007-06-24 23:23:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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