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    dots Submission Name: Unknown Love....dots
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    Author: EbonyBlood
    ASL Info:    14/F/Can.
    Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 79/79/73
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsUnknown Love....dots
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    I thought maybe...I would share my life with you?
    I'd tear out my heart and give it to you.
    You forgot to give it back, and you took it all the way across the world with you.

    You left it...
    You never came back, like you promised.
    I knew the second I let you go that day you would never come back, and I would never feel your gentle lips, or see your beautiful smile.

    I'd see now, as I stare up into the clouds, that my heart and mind are not within my body.
    You took my heart, and the clouds snatched my mind.
    I'd like to get them back, But my heart aches to be with you, and my mind doesn't like this world.

    I see now, that maybe my heart loves you, and my mind loves heaven or clouds.
    I'd like to think that when that cold metal touches my wrists tonight, that there IS a god watching me.
    That he'll see the pain flushing through me..

    And that just maybe, he'd send you back, or at least take me to heaven with him.
    That I'll see you from there, watch my heart die within your hands.
    I'll watch you cry, and bury it in your new backyard. You cry and cry, each tear adds a new beat to my heart.

    I come back to reality, in your arms. My pain lifts into the air. My smile over powers the sun, As I see....

    You did love me.




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