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    dots Submission Name: the most horrible day everdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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       this has been the most horrible day ever. not even to laugh about it but to take this day seriously. i woke up in the worst modd and it all went downhill from there. hittin the bottom wasnt that hard but then you gotta walk back up hill. i hate those big as hills cuz today was a steep ass drop and dont think im ever comin back up.


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    this is the worst day of my life
    imma end it all now with the blade of my knife
    just to know this wont happen again
    im gonna make sure that today is the end.
    this is the most horrible day ever
    nothing could be worse until the end of forever
    but forever never ends so nothing comes after
    not a tear not a kiss not even laughter
    so tell me when your ready to see the end of this day
    cuz when the worst is over theres nothing to say
    trying my hardest to make everything right
    and all i got back was a half put up fight
    so tell me when your ready but til then i wait
    told you i would even if you are late




    Submitted on 2007-06-25 14:19:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I am sorry you are having a rough time girl! You just can't give up and even though you wonder when it will get better - "IT" will. Hang tough girl.

    I'm sending you smiles and sunshine and blessings for the best day ever

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      The way that this peom is written makes it kind of hard to take seriously. Overall it seems kind of over the top and exaggerated. The rhyming also seems extremely forced and there is a lack of meter, perhaps this is on purpose.
    | Posted on 2007-06-26 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]


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