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    dots Submission Name: my salvationdots
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    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 104/106/76
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 82
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    dotsmy salvationdots
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    twirl me into fantasies of graceful indulgence,
    you find your way into my heart,
    hold my hand so life makes some sense,
    Love is our newfound perfected art.
    your eyes are bright like a firefly,
    you're like spring with promises in bloom,
    your words are the cool breeze in mid july,
    Your presence fills this empty room.
    keep me close as we roam,
    those places only we know,
    love me with a love free of explanation,
    be my everything, be my salvation.





    Submitted on 2007-06-25 21:37:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really love this piece! I wouldn't change anything about it. I found it to be warm and romantic with
    just enough mystery to it.
    Love and Peace,
    lynn
    | Posted on 2007-06-26 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem seems to be kind of short. The emotion seems to ring true but I believce it could be built upon moreso. There is a distinct use of rhyme in the poem, but the rythm seems a bit choppy in places. Aside from that it was very enjoyable and something you could probably give your girlfriend on Valentine's day.
    | Posted on 2007-06-26 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]


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