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    dots Submission Name: watching you leavedots
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    Author: EternallyMystic
    ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
    Elite Ratio:    2.05 - 9/18/25
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    To Watch You Leaving . . .

    is to know such pain, it's jagged edges tearing into my soul. As a stake from the garden tears into the warm, dark earth.

    To Watch You Leaving . . .

    knowing all the while that never again will I fit myself, warm with sleep, against your solid back.

    Nor hear your steady breathing. Or feel the beating of your heart.

    To Watch You Leaving . . .

    aware in every moment of every day that my dreams, my future; once tied with silken ribbons to yours, will never come to be.

    And the mornings once so silent and hopeful, us gazing at the sunset and so gently awaiting forever - are now but small pieces of my past.

    To Watch You Leaving . . .

    your heart a tight fist of anger and your dry eyes betraying nothing of you. I cry for both of us, my love, because you will not.

    To Watch You Leaving . . .

    is to know that I've lost my place on this earth. My station. My heart's home. That I will wander, forever a nomad. Alone and afraid. And in my troubled dreams watch you leave, again and again.

    For the balance of my days.




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