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    dots Submission Name: Why?dots
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    Author: EternallyMystic
    ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
    Elite Ratio:    2.05 - 9/18/25
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsWhy?dots
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    3am
    27th floor
    I'm sitting in the windowsill, your picture taped to the glass
    Feel your arms around me but you're not here
    I wear this shirt cause it has your scent
    It's the closest I will ever be to you again

    City sounds remind me of when we owned it all
    We walked these streets and drank it all in
    Never in my life had I felt so close to heaven
    Never in my life have I felt so alone

    There's a burning inside me that won't go away
    It won't let me sleep
    It won't let me think of anything else but you
    Let it rain to wash me clean

    Why do you pretend like
    I don't matter to you
    when you're all that
    matters to me?




    Submitted on 2007-06-25 23:36:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That was good especially the end part. I too like to write based on what I'm feeling at the moment, it's the only way to get your purest emotions expressed.
    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by 7makaveli | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks for your comment on why? i like to write about what i feel at that moment in time i wont even have to think about it, everything just pours out.
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by EternallyMystic | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed reading your piece. It has a sad and powerful essence to it. Good job. : )
    | Posted on 2007-06-26 00:00:00 | by jas_dragon | [ Reply to This ]


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