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    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 464
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    Bytes: 468



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       I have no idea why I wrote this. I kind of hate it actualy. Hmmm Whtevr


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    dotsBamdots
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    BAM
    I was shot on lovers lane
    She told me I shouldn't move
    that we weren't playin a game
    Before she pulled the trigger
    she whispered in my ear
    I love you darling
    I won't shoot
    You have nothing to fear
    But she's a liar
    and now I'm higher
    above my bloody face
    And now that I'm dead
    and the bullet's in my head
    She can laugh all she wants




    Submitted on 2007-06-25 23:49:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hahaha, i know it was a sad poem, but it has a fularious picture. good job, i like it a lot - good rhyme.
    | Posted on 2007-07-04 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]


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