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    dots Submission Name: Oh Doctor Doctor!?dots
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    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 503
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 800



    Description:
       yeah.
    Thats my brain.


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    dotsOh Doctor Doctor!?dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Girl: Stiches is what holds this heart together..
    Will You be my stiches?

    Boy: Baby, I already opperated. You're Safe

    Girl: In Your Arms?

    Boy: Under my knife if thats what you mean.

    Both: Ohhhhhhh!

    Girl: In Your Arm..Will I Wake?

    Boy: certainly.. When the anesthesia retreats.

    Girl: Oh Doctor Doctor! can you find my Heart Beat?!

    Boy: Yes Ma'am. Its right here. [points at
    heart]

    Girl: Oh Doctor Doctor! Must I bleed?!

    Boy: To know that you're alive my Dear.
    Now hush young Lady. Your Speech is
    slurring.. How 'bout a little more ?

    Girl: Yes, please...




    Submitted on 2007-06-26 01:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it was overall good! ...i mean, it was wierd, but hey, whatever i'm not usually a huge fan of traditional love poetry, but then again yours was anything but traditional. i don't know what i'm saying... it reminded me of anime...cute!




    i know...i'm a p**sy
    | Posted on 2007-06-26 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]


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