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    dots Submission Name: Messages sent on the winddots
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    Author: poppi
    Elite Ratio:    7.47 - 72/55/37
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       working on free verse and i need to find something to reallly inspire me to write another story


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    dotsMessages sent on the winddots
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    Alone in a field
    The man sits
    But whole heartedly,
    He talks to the wind
    whispering secrets passed.....

    The whiporwill listens in,
    And aslo talks to the wind
    The message sent back.
    A smiling face
    With lips unchanged

    Worn by time,
    From tails of a life
    Spent with eternity.
    But never being at all
    As every lie lives on

    Today though, even love wont fade
    Ignoring the inwards anger
    A place not recognized
    Sunshine, a taste of freedom
    Even clouds wont touch this sky




    Submitted on 2007-06-26 18:54:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought this was a great try at free verse. You made every line come together well in this piece. Full of good imagery and flow. I like the title of the poem, it drew me in. My favorite part of all "Even clouds won't touch this sky". I thought that line was just simply amazing. I enjoyed the story being told here. Thanks for the share of this wonderful piece. Good day to ya and good luck with all your writing!

    ~Gigglebox
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by gigglebox | [ Reply to This ]


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