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    dots Submission Name: dream mine and yours proves itdots

    Author: gloomyanddoomy
    ASL Info:    17,female
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 81/426/527
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsdream mine and yours proves itdots

    we were laying
    there in tall grass
    by a lake
    were the light from the moon
    was making the lake shimer
    you held me close
    as we watched the stars
    you were making me giggle
    to bad I cant remember why
    you promised never to let go
    and last night I had another dream
    i shut my eyes when i fell asleep
    to see you laying next to me
    just laying there
    staring into my eyes
    its nights like these
    when the moons out
    and i am awake
    thinking of you if we
    could become us agian
    I want to hear your heart beat agian
    not in a dream, for real agian
    and now i know you want me too
    your dreams you talk about
    they seem so real
    even through I thought you loved her
    your dream was you were sleeping with me
    and my head was on your chest
    you said that with no regrets
    it didnt bother you to say it
    obvisously it ment something to you
    if only it really woulda happened
    i know you want it to
    just because it happened recently
    and it wasnt a regret to you

    Submitted on 2007-06-27 00:08:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice poem. : ) I liked the imagery in the begining.
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by jas_dragon | [ Reply to This ]

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