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    dots Submission Name: hell is what you don't want it to bedots
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    Author: Darc Angel
    ASL Info:    18/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 10/5/56
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotshell is what you don't want it to bedots
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    Sun's rising
    Bird's chirping
    World's spinning
    I'm bleeding

    Paltry genesis of the defunct brain
    Pathetic soul of me staying sane
    Revolving earth of the deadly society
    Unravel the ugliness of masked piety
    Whining away the deranged spirits
    Stuffing the evidences of mortal greeds

    Principles and supposition casted aside
    Intuitions and clairvoyance committed suicide
    Existance is a result of illusion
    Pretense is an act of controversion




    Submitted on 2007-06-27 04:40:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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