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    dots Submission Name: take me away sweet suicidedots
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    Author: Darc Angel
    ASL Info:    18/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 10/5/56
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotstake me away sweet suicidedots
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    I wanna leave and never come back
    Just take me now no need to pack
    I`m tired of trying
    I`m tired of crying
    I wanna leave now
    To live like this I no longer know how
    Take me far away
    Where the birds sing and children play
    Somebody please take my life
    So I can leave this world and strife
    Lord come lead me to Heaven I need a guide
    or I will go to hell committing suicide




    Submitted on 2007-06-27 04:42:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Darc Angel. I've read ur poem and i think it's really good. it reminds me alot of myself and i just wnated to let u know that if u ever needed someone to talk to u can e-mail me at sk8rrchick1993@yahoo.com my name is sarah. And don't forget there is always hope even if it is just a small amount.
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by hurtbutstilhere | [ Reply to This ]


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