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    dots Submission Name: twisteddots
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    Author: Darc Angel
    ASL Info:    18/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 10/5/56
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotstwisteddots
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    Harsh words & violent blows
    Hidden secrets nobody knows
    Eyes are open, hands are fisted
    Deep inside I'm warped & twisted
    So many tricks & so many lies
    Too many whens & too many whys
    Nobody's special, nobody's gifted
    I'm just me, warped & twisted
    Sleeping awake & choking on a dream
    Listening loudly to a silent scream
    Call my mind, the number's unlisted
    Lost in someone so warped & twisted
    On my knees, alive but dead
    Look at the invisible blood I've bled
    I'm not gone, my mind has drifted
    Don't expect much, I'm warped & twisted
    Burnt out, wasted, empty, & hollow
    Today's just yesterday's tomorrow
    The sun died out, the ashes sifted
    I'm still here, warped & twisted




    Submitted on 2007-06-27 05:27:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a very heartfelt poem, i could tell. the ryme and verse were quite good, and the flow of the rythym was precise and to the point. the only thing i would say is keep up the good work, and remember this; a good poem doesn`t nesesarily have to ryhme as long as it is from the heart and well meant, such as this was. in this case, the ryhmes worked out perfect, but don`t let the lack of a ryhme hold you back. just keep feeling what you write.
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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