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    dots Submission Name: secrets of the heartdots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
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    i want to be friends, though i wish it were more;
    yet i won`t lower myself and push you like that.
    now i am afraid that whatever i say
    will push you away from being my friend.

    how do i tell you how you make me laugh
    without feeling like i`m being a fool?
    how do i tell you how wonderful you are
    without feeling like i`m letting my gaurd down?

    why is it you make me laugh the way you do?
    why do i feel queesy when i hear your voice?
    when i am around you, it`s all i can do
    to keep from falling my head over heels.

    i love your personality, your smile, your heart.
    everything about you shines radiant beams.
    whenever you`re near, my heart cries for you.
    you shine bright from the inside out.

    so now, my friend, what do i do?
    i can`t tell you how i feel.
    i guess, for now, i`ll have to hide
    the battle fighting secrets of the heart...




    Submitted on 2007-06-27 10:02:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OMG this is a fantastic write bravo for the expression and thoughts, you captured your feelings for this person, I like it when I was reading it, it gave me a smile that I couldnt hide like as if you were talking to me IDK, but my smile was on, enjoyed it very much


    theinforment
    | Posted on 2013-02-15 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      i had a best friend....and felt this way...we felt somewhat a mutual feeling...this poem reminds me of the awkward moments when we tried to express our feelings...but we always ended up saying that it wouldn't work between us...maybe we were too afraid to spoil the friendship...we played a bit, but no more than that...seemed there were boundaries whether we liked it or not...

    there is a longing, a frustration, a resign..

    i felt that in this poem.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is such a sweet poem! Great job!
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by psalm305 | [ Reply to This ]


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