Description: 6/29/07: i added the verses for my irish first and middle name, as well, so i hope you enjoy!
6/26/07: when i took creative writing for english this year (2006-2007), i learned about acrostic poems and started writing poems based on peoples names, where the first letter of the first word for each line would spell out a name when you look at it vertically. this was my first atempt at this new style of writing acrostics that i created, and i used my irish last name for the name. thus comes the name of it, dhiarmaid: an irish proverb. i hope you enjoy.
dhiarmaid: an irish proverb -------------------------------------------
many days have come,
and many days will pass.
in this life, i see the pain
reflected again and again;
existing day after day.
never in this life will
i fully understand, that my pain
causes others to live...
doth the wind blow?
hark, i listen;
it is as gentle
as the treacherous sea,
reminding me of my pain.
maithar, why does the wind blow
as harsh as the sea`s rolls?
it is the will of the maker, child;
death without it is worse...
Mmmmm, I really liked it the whole poem had voice and a magical effect to it! Genius! Truly Genius, HOWEVER, I felt the "Reminding me of my own pain" was just a bit of a blegh sentence. Other than that, I really loved it.
Wow... this is great. And I just have to say, YAY!! I took CW writing year, too! I had the greatest teacher! Anyways, about this poem, I loved the ending. I honestly made me think, wow. I think this is deep, I love it a lot. I can't think of much to say for it, but I really like this.
Be well, and keep writing,
~Azura*
Submission Name: dhiarmaid: an irish proverb
