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    dots Submission Name: dhiarmaid: an irish proverbdots

    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Satire
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       6/29/07: i added the verses for my irish first and middle name, as well, so i hope you enjoy!

    6/26/07: when i took creative writing for english this year (2006-2007), i learned about acrostic poems and started writing poems based on peoples names, where the first letter of the first word for each line would spell out a name when you look at it vertically. this was my first atempt at this new style of writing acrostics that i created, and i used my irish last name for the name. thus comes the name of it, dhiarmaid: an irish proverb. i hope you enjoy.

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    dotsdhiarmaid: an irish proverbdots

    many days have come,
    and many days will pass.
    in this life, i see the pain
    reflected again and again;
    existing day after day.

    never in this life will
    i fully understand, that my pain
    causes others to live...

    doth the wind blow?
    hark, i listen;
    it is as gentle
    as the treacherous sea,
    reminding me of my pain.
    maithar, why does the wind blow
    as harsh as the sea`s rolls?
    it is the will of the maker, child;
    death without it is worse...

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      Mmmmm, I really liked it the whole poem had voice and a magical effect to it! Genius! Truly Genius, HOWEVER, I felt the "Reminding me of my own pain" was just a bit of a blegh sentence. Other than that, I really loved it.
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... this is great. And I just have to say, YAY!! I took CW writing year, too! I had the greatest teacher! Anyways, about this poem, I loved the ending. I honestly made me think, wow. I think this is deep, I love it a lot. I can't think of much to say for it, but I really like this.
    Be well, and keep writing,
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]

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