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    dots Submission Name: Destroyed Worlddots

    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    24/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 58/57/17
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsDestroyed Worlddots

    Our children are dying
    each and every day
    we close our eyes
    and pretend it's all okay

    Our husbands and wives
    are off to war
    we support the troops
    by putting ribbons on our doors

    We grab our loved ones
    and hold them tight
    we promise them
    everything will be alright

    The truth is much darker
    than we want to say
    so we go about our lives
    like it's just another day

    And every single night
    before we lay
    we look to heaven
    and quietly pray

    That we never get that call
    the one we all fear
    we would tell them they're mistaken
    while our eyes begin to tear

    When will this end
    how long will it take
    before we're all destroyed
    by our very own hate

    Submitted on 2007-06-27 12:28:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great job here! You have expressed the feelings of many, and I could not agree with you more. This poem is very appropriate for today. Until we can look at our neighbors without hate and our neighbors can trust us, war shall not stop. I applaud your voice for sense. Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent story here! I often wonder how man, with such great capacity for noble emotions such as love, sincerity, charity, honesty, etc., is so often and so easily moved to extreme hatred, violence, and war!
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I reallllllllllly enjoyed and loved this poem!
    Yes it is very true..and I'm glad you thought about writing this..people need to be reminded of the cause to this destroyed world..and I like how you put the concept into poetic form..perfectly clever
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      i really enjoyed this write of yours. the whole piece expressed your feelings very well, and it also earnestly told a simple fact: things go on today that are just not right, yet we simply look away, trying not to face the facts (maybe cause one feels like there is nothing one could do). Well, again nice job, you got the theme and the feelings across well; I guess it's up to us when it will end, so what do we say?
    | Posted on 2007-06-28 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this. its very to-the-point and it expresses a very bold opinion/truth that society has itself [censored]ed.

    good work
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very powerful and very well written! I really enjoyed this piece! beautiful work! keep writing:0)
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      A very poignant and very powerful piece of poetry here, and so very true that we often times simply forget it! You have brought home to us a most cogent topic in a highly poetic form...bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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