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    dots Submission Name: Healingdots
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    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 510
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1358



    Description:
       This is my way of opening up about an Abusive ex boyfriend.


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    dotsHealingdots
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    I need to be healed
    from deep within
    I need you to hold my soul
    make me ok again

    He hurt me bad
    What he did is not ok
    I'm hurting inside
    Its time to speak out today

    I need to move on
    and forgive him maybe
    I won't take him back
    Even when he pleads 'Baby,...'

    He hurt me down deep
    way inside
    He'll never be truly sorry
    Even tho he fake cries

    I found him the other day
    I tried to play nice
    We talked awhile on myspace
    But that wouldn't suffice

    He did it again
    he said those mean things
    all the old wounds are full of salt
    and only tears do they bring

    I keep telling myself
    I won't let him back in my life
    won't let him destroy all my progress
    with lies like a knife

    I'm begining to heal
    writting to you
    letting it all out
    with words that are meaningful and true

    You don't have to take it
    Step up today
    Face this demon
    and send him or her away

    Many have suffered before us
    But its our choice to change the wrong
    release yourself from abuse
    and begin to sing your song




    Submitted on 2007-06-27 18:43:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one was good. I like the beginning but the last two stanzas were ok. I liked that it was simple but still said alot, not like a bunch of words that didn't describe much. And that's good that your not going back with him and not putting up with his crap. Good work.
    | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]


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