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    dots Submission Name: ode to adrianadots

    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Childrens
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       this is actually a song i remember from before i was kidnapped as a toddler. my mother would sing it to me in my cradle, and it recently helped me find my twin brother, duke. we thought we were just two people who happened to meet each other, but he overheard me singing this and we realized who we were. so, he said i should publish mama`s song for her, because she died of heartbreak when i was taken. so, here it is...

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    dotsode to adrianadots

    play your
    little one,
    and sing for me a song;
    nice and sweet, the melody
    dances on your tongue.
    end your sorrow and
    remember all the joy you have.
    make some music
    and you`ll see
    undying are the laughs.
    let us sing again...

    Submitted on 2007-06-27 20:34:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a beautiful song.
    the story in your description is even more beautiful and i wish you all the luck in the world.

    just one little thing i need to say since you are new to the site and prolly dont know but... there used to be a restriction for posting on here... limit was 2 posts a day and while that isnt there anymore it is still hoped that everyone will honour it. so try not to post too much and work on commenting too... people are more likely to read your stuff if they see you reading theirs and other ppls...

    anyways... welcome to this site...
    i hope you enjoy it here and grow heaps as a writer. there are some wonderful people on this site who are really awesome at encouraging people by giving good comments...

    god luck
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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