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    dots Submission Name: A Precious Fewdots
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    Author: goveiac
    ASL Info:    30/M/Toronto
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 57/71/61
    Words: 317
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 79
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1900



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    dotsA Precious Fewdots
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    I could make you scared if I want me to
    I'm not prepared, but if I have to
    He said I can make you scared
    It's kinda what I do
    If you are prepared to
    Here is what I propose to do
    Your in Russia
    And more than a million works of
    Are wisked out to the woods
    When the Nazis find the hole place dark
    They'd think god's
    Left the museum for good

    I make you scared, if that's what I do
    If you're prepared , if I have to
    If I make you scared and you pay me to
    If that's the deal
    Now here's what I can do for you
    Now there's a focus group that can prove
    That is all nothing but cold calculations

    Tests have shown that suspicious or hostile
    Their lives need not be shortened
    Truth be told
    They can live a long,long wile
    Tickled to death by their importance

    If you make me scared
    If that's what you do
    If I'm unclear can I get out of this thing
    With me and you
    If you feel scared or a bit confused
    I gotta say This sounds a little beyond anything I am used to

    Now there a precious few
    That can prove that at the root
    That is all nothing but cold calculations

    Clearly entranced you're leaning back now
    Defanged destroyer limps into the bay
    Down at the beach it's attracting quite a crowd
    As kids wade through blood out to it and play

    OK you make me scared you did what you set out to do
    I'm not prepared , you really had me going there for a minute or two
    He said, you make me scared too,
    I wasn't through I was getting through
    I gotta go, it's been a pleasure doing business with you.




    Submitted on 2007-06-28 15:11:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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