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    dots Submission Name: The Heart of a Blackbirddots
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    Author: EbonyBlood
    ASL Info:    14/F/Can.
    Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 79/79/73
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Story/Longing
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    dotsThe Heart of a Blackbirddots
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    December 14th, 1999

    Dear Diary,
    It is December, and the first snowfall has come. I am deeply excited for Christmas.
    Though, I miss the wonderful song of the morning birds. I was sad to watch them all fly away, I watched while sitting on my swing.
    I thought about being a bird, I would love to be a Blackbird. Their beautiful black feather shine with the sun, and their bright orange beaks pecking at the ground for worms and other insects.
    Watching them scavenge for food along the forest floors they soar through the air, free.

    I would die to be able to fly away every winter and fly to a warm paradise and to have to worry about nothing. Then to return home to a fresh spring with beautiful blossoms popping up everywhere.
    My life then would be truly perfect, until then I'll watch the Blackbird from my window, and hold onto the feather I have. I shall ever hold it within my grave, it hopes I will turn into a beautiful blackbird.




    February 6th, 2000
    Alma Brown
    Died peacefully in her sleep, with her family by her side. Cause of death was Cancer. This was the last Diary entry. After the funeral.. it is said a Blackbird was seen flying towards south.




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      I enjoyed the thought of being bird. Truly makes you wish to be one. I rather love Ravens myself. But i must disagree with the negative view of winter. I know that this is just something of your own opinion and your entitled to it. but i actualy enjoy winter. For me its just ive always loved the snow fall and being enclosed within the grey and white. It makes me feel like im home for some strange reason. Still i must admit my love for the lovely spring days. Not two hot but warm and with a cool breeze. I think you could make a book or novel out of that. I think you could make one if you think of more examples of someone wanting to be free and put those situations in a diary form. you would have book. ive read a lot of stories that are written in diary form. anyway i liked the feeling and image of this. good job.
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by Seraphim X | [ Reply to This ]


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