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    dots Submission Name: Another genuisdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    24/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 619/551/200
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
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    dotsAnother genuisdots
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    Another Genuis
    sits alone
    encompassing the past
    a single beat
    of a gentle heart
    as A child rest
    An anomonly
    within himself
    or so it seems
    pitter-patter, pitter-patter
    Alone.
    his heart beats

    A darkness hidden
    blocked,
    by the sun
    his breath
    is waning
    it's all undone

    Something so simple
    so tragic!
    so true?
    The eclipse
    on the front
    drawing me to you

    as the star falls
    the gentle breath rest
    a breath so cold, now gone
    a hollowed filled abreast

    Another Genuis
    sits alone
    its tragic, but true
    the cold soil
    falls through his hands
    drawing me to you

    his breathe
    the past
    all of it encompassed

    pitter-patter, pitter-patter
    it's all undone
    pitter-patter, pitter-patter
    his gentle breath now gone




    Submitted on 2007-06-28 18:33:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      real cute poem dude. i think the pitter pater thing fits cool.


    peace
    Grim
    | Posted on 2007-07-07 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      yo dat waz tight. and all genious. truly magnificent, mad kool, magnifiq, and more i gtg i would write more

    peace
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      okies here we go; read it the first time last night and my mind has been known to sometimes find things more intense the first read through- but sometimes the other way aronud too, so sorries if this comment isn't exactly what it might have/could have been if I'd written it at absolute first glance
    and i know i usually do the stanza break thing in commenting but idk if I feel like it....so yeah....nyway:
    yeah- it was/is still among the most beautiful things I've ever read <3
    it's hard for me to explain but the way you present something so fragile in such a straightforward way...idk, it turns my heart inside out; guess it's sometimes easy to forget how many people walk around day to day with open wounds. I'm not sure what all to say...because I'm not sure what all I can say and how much of it I can put into words- I seriously think this is among my 3 favorite things I've read of yours and pretty high up there as far as things I've read, period. I'm in love with it and it does remind me of something....something i heard in a dream I think, it's a bit of a lengthly dream but it was mossy and muggy and bitterly beautiful as far as nighttime dreamscenes go and I was alone with the voice speaking it.....had this dream a long time ago though and it's not too vivid in my mind right now, I know it wasn't the same wording really...what came to mind was some line the voice mentioned about a slightly chaotic pulse...like something trying to leap into the sky itself but it's not by random- it's drawn to someone who can settle it down, who can make it okay again...
    idk, I'm sorry if that's confusing....it just means a lot, what this write means on its own and then that it reminds me of that dream- I didn't think anything would remind me of it so much =] .
    okies, well byes, much love
    -Jess
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]



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