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    dots Submission Name: waterdots
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    Author: shmurr
    ASL Info:    18 / male / maine
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 34/129/127
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 107
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1191



    Description:
       i think the best song i've written so far


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    dotswaterdots
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    I took a walk down to the harbor where the path is worn thin,
    where the water wrinkles orange and there’s sand on the wind.
    I was too far from the city to hear the cars, to see the clothes.
    I was miles off the map, but it was just like home.

    I watched a brown branch turn black against the sky,
    as the sky went yellow before the light began to die.
    I was too close to the answer, all my baggage was released.
    I was too far from the suburbs, to see the houses, to see the streets.

    I saw the water ascending and gathering to make the cloud,
    and then the cloud collapsing into rain to quench the ground.
    I witnessed a circle far too vast to see where we begin,
    while the clamor from the concrete town was washed away by an eastern wind.

    To the west the birds collected in a swarm above the bay,
    like tiny flakes of metal drawn to a magnet beyond the waves.
    I saw the water breathing as it was dimpled by the rain.
    Routine is the silent catalyst that is dragging us toward our graves,
    I thought as the sun dropped behind the flat-line of the hot horizon.




    Submitted on 2007-06-28 19:08:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was beautiful and would deffinately make a beautiful song. great rythym and rhyme
    | Posted on 2007-06-28 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]



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