Description: My brother, who is an awesome artist, is in jail until Sept. and he sends me great letters with outstanding pics drawn on the envelope - I try to write a poem for each pic - this one was a Zebra.
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Walk Softly -------------------------------------------
Walk softly ~ in between the shadow and the light
One half black
One half white
Men in hunt
tHE striped look
upon the face;
Read between the lines
upon the Zebra
I liked the poem as a whole I just didn't get what the lines/ strpes of the zebra had to do with a dining lion. Anyway It'd be more likely to be eaten by a leppord. Lepords love zebra meat more than any other kind. But lion is easier to rhyme with and it goes with the assoncial style of the piece. Thanks for the read. I'm going to bed now. the sun is rising fast.
The title caught me, because of the Yeats (i think its yeats poem) Aeda ask for the garments of heaven, or whatever its called, where upon the line...tread softly, for you tread on my dreams, occurs. Amazing poem, but anyways back to yours.
I am impressed with how much you did with a drawing of a zebra. I have always been impressed by a random unartistic subject being put into an artistic light, you did well.
I loved the first line, the subsequent line breaks were also very well done. I didnt know the word "asin" had to look it up and all I got was the seventh month of the hindu calender (???). So Im lost on that word and line. I like the way you play with the cross between a zebra and a jailbird (that seems to be what is happening to me) both of whom where the black and white stripes (at least traditionally) I think they where orange now in jail, but the analogies were very well done. Great last line in that same vain of thinking.