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    dots Submission Name: Orientationdots

    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       My version of Robert Frost's "Road Not Taken," maybe?

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    East is right;
    The sensible, logical
    Atta-girl, oughta-go
    You-won’t-regret-it direction.

    South is old news
    Shoulda-been, remember-when

    North is down-the-road,
    Around-the-corner, far-off
    Tomorrow town.

    But I always choose
    The one they call
    Turn back
    The other way,
    You’ll-be-sorry, sorry, sorry.

    Funny how going east
    You end up west,
    And vice-versa.

    Submitted on 2007-06-29 00:13:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      first of all, some minor suggestions:

    the second stanza is inconsistently missing hyphens, so change it to this?

    South is old news
    Shoulda-been, remember-when

    and also maybe insert another hyphen here:

    And vice-versa.

    but other than that, nice poem. interesting how you characterized each direction. also, i liked how you said east was the
    "You-won’t-regret-it direction."
    but then how the others said
    "You’ll-be-sorry, sorry, sorry."

    the whole making your own choices or following the 'advice' of others thing comes through. sometimes it's good to listen to other people, but going your own way matters too. but then it's confusing when you think you're going one direction but it turns out you're going in another one. because robert frost got it wrong. life isn't choosing a bunch of paths; it's a whole meandering maze of options, and sometimes you can't even tell where the paths are, or you have to make a new one.
    | Posted on 2007-08-10 00:00:00 | by explosions | [ Reply to This ]
      i always wondered whether you could go so far east you found west...

    im still not sure to be honest.
    i know that when you buy an around the world air ticket you have to travel in the same direction right the way round...
    i live on the east coast... travelled west and somehow ended up back on the east coast but im not convinced theres any relation there...

    and south has been done before.
    and birds fly south for winter [though that makes all the birds flying to my place coz we're about as south as you can get and well... hmmm... maybe they fly north ]
    and when things go wrong dont we say "it all went south..."?

    and north...
    well... north always seems so unattainable anyways...
    follow the yellow brick road
    go visit santa at the north pole...

    so perhaps the reality is that there is only one of two ways to go and maybe its all the same it just depends whether you are facing forwards or back...

    but well... orienteering isnt one of my strong points. the only way i made it through europe without getting too hideously lost was to look at everything and hope that i would recognize something twice haha...
    dont even TRY to give me a map... its just not worth the hassle!
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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