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    dots Submission Name: Pay Backs A Bitchdots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Rant/Betrayal
    Total Views: 639
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1161

       its not editted i don't really want to take my time i want to write what comes to mind... its silent in this room i am submitting the entry on to, and i don't realy have much time so take this as you will .... i'd love to hear your thoughts :) thanks for reading

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    dotsPay Backs A Bitchdots

    you decived me knowing i'd walk right into it.
    knowing my wants as well as my needs
    you took advantage of me as well as my innocents
    you conditioned me into your sick twisted thoughts...
    you molded me into what you always wanted..
    and soon you had it 12yr old and you were now getting your quick fixes...
    there no longer was a wait...
    conditioning was not needed...
    by the time i was 15 i wanted it to end to stop i disliked what our realationship turned into...
    more so disliked what you turned into
    and eventully turned me into...
    a person who accpected what you did to me
    a person who simply allowed it and sigh... didn't mention it to ANYONE...
    You abused me!
    You used me!
    You hurt me!
    In every way shape and form...
    But now its my turn!
    I am no longer that little girl you conditioned so long ago
    I am no longer that naitive little girl whom believes everythings she hears.
    I have done what needed to be done so long ago...
    And you sir,
    Will pay for what you did to me and so many others!!!

    Submitted on 2007-06-29 01:32:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow whoever it is you are talking about sounds as though he deserves to get whats coming and he will get it. I think this piece is a great write you dont need to change it at all. its very powerful with the words and emotions in it. im sorry you went through this...i know how you feel. Great write.
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      This was well writtin, I don't think I would even consider edditing it. Things writtin of raw emotion are better left untouched. THis is verry powerful and well writtin. I hope you get the justice you seek against this person. Good pice, keep writing.

    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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