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    dots Submission Name: endless...dots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Rant/Passion
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    dotsendless...dots
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    endless pain.
    longing.
    it is a dark life i lead;
    sorrowful
    and lonely.
    beneath the surface, my heart
    endures as it dies;
    taking slower to breathe:
    help me, it cries, for i will die...

    call my name; let me
    hear your voice.
    raise me from the dead.
    i`m drowning in my
    sorrowful soul;
    take my hand, and pull me away;
    out of the black abyss.
    protect me.
    hide me. shelter me.
    end my pain. let me find
    rest in your arms...

    endless pain.
    longing.
    in my death, i hear a voice;
    singing to me
    as i lay dying...

    "take my hand, follow me;
    off on a journey to a distant land.
    protection i`ll give you; for our
    hearts have joined together in love.
    endless is me love for you; now
    rest in my arms, where you`ll be safe..."

    sorrow fades. he
    takes my hand,
    ending the pain.
    i no longer feel cold; death is gone.
    never will i leave him for another.
    how could i? i live for him!
    enter my heart, love;
    i live it in your care.
    stand by me,
    embrace me; i have finally found
    rest; safe in your arms...




    Submitted on 2007-06-29 10:16:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has a spiritual undertone that is quite impressive. Having read your comments prior to reading the poem, the poem reflects a life spent chasing after that which never satisfies. The writer recognizes that the entire time, the one that would satisfy was there along. That is a God-thing. God seeks relationship with each of us.

    You write very well.
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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