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    dots Submission Name: better off deaddots
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    Author: DontLetGo421
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsbetter off deaddots
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    if there was a way to control your affection
    i would so i could smile at my own reflection
    i understand you love her,but i cant accept
    you left me on the dime so i burden regret
    i waste away stuck on the pitch in your voice
    you say we're over and that its your final choice

    we'll be drifted away come the end of this summer season
    and by then i hope you will have found a better reason
    cause baby once you soak up the words i left unsaid
    i'll sit and laugh at you because you'll be better off dead




    Submitted on 2007-06-29 19:51:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very good, nice wording. ;) I bet he will. Men are dumb.
    | Posted on 2007-08-24 00:00:00 | by pens_that_stab | [ Reply to This ]
      oh boy.
    i like it
    | Posted on 2007-07-15 00:00:00 | by cbgurl413 | [ Reply to This ]
      you sum up everything i want to say to my ex and put it into words
    its great
    love stacey
    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
      NICE
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]


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