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    dots Submission Name: Battle Crydots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I'm in a pit of depression which no one, at times, is immune. I haven't been able to write nor really communicate other than tears and though I'm able to pull myself up a lot quicker now I am still human and though my faith is strong and getting stronger this only makes the evil want to destroy me more.

    Thank you fellow Elitists for your poems and words which give me strength. Love, Peace, Joy!!!

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    dotsBattle Crydots

    My heart and soul
    cry out to the divine
    I'm lost in darkness
    tell me I'll be fine
    For in my service
    I'm being attacked
    I've let fear in
    and my brain is racked
    With feelings of doubt
    and of failing again
    I trust in virtue
    but I'm born to sin
    Please my Lord
    uplift our race
    And tears for all
    have drenched my face
    That we may be uplifted
    in your eyes
    And not forsaken
    to Devil's lies
    Strengthen my faith
    and be my guide
    Fill me with Love
    to carry on
    so my worries
    may be gone

    Submitted on 2004-06-17 14:16:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved it, everything about it fits together. Really shows a deep emotion that maybe no one, but your innerself is going to understand.
    | Posted on 2004-06-17 00:00:00 | by MyHeart2Yours | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't like the rhyme scheme at first but it works well in this piece. Although I am an atheist I can still understand the feelings behind this...
    | Posted on 2004-06-17 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I trust in virtue
    but I'm born to sin

    Know how you feel... hate those times of depression that come upon s all every once in a while. This was me, a few months ago... you've found the words to express what I didn't. Don't lose hope, and don't worry, better things will come!
    | Posted on 2004-06-17 00:00:00 | by Erchomenos | [ Reply to This ]

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