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    dots Submission Name: From a Flaming Uterus to Broken Glassdots
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    Author: Old
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 69/97/93
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsFrom a Flaming Uterus to Broken Glassdots
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    Geriatric Coition
    leading to Evil.

    Unhinging abolition
    from an alcohol still.

    The blistering of skin
    from the unforgivable sin.
    A childe borne of an ass;
    He fell into broken glass.

    The doctor stumped by
    a rectal birth, but found
    himself only asking "why?"
    Upon the sound of a
    crackling baby's cry.

    From a flaming uterus
    to a pile of broken glass.
    in the childe's throat was
    A giant wide open gash.

    Cacophonies of laughter
    borne of an alcohol still.

    with flesh charred there after;
    This childe was born to kill.




    Submitted on 2007-06-29 22:11:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A bit gruesome, but I like it. It's very original, and I think the imagery is great, however lurid it may appear. I love that it rhymes, too. I love to read poetry that rhymes; I think it's beautiful when done correctly.

    "A giant wide open gash."

    this line strikes me as redundant, and I think it would be just fine without the word "giant."


    Good job. I really enjoyed this.
    Keep writing
    ~Venia
    | Posted on 2008-08-28 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow... that's gross... a truly gruesome thought...well written...but siiick nesss!!!! That's really all I can say...I'm going to go puke now.
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]



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