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    dots Submission Name: Journeydots
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    Author: Seraphim X
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 32/41/33
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsJourneydots
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    Forward across the untold stars
    None to hold us but our conviction
    Reach for the infinite in life’s possibility

    The fire with no fear but wind to fly
    Ride the waves of celestial bliss
    Forever to the wills of freedom

    The cosmos to embrace in eternity
    Loves grace to guide the heart
    To the fullest reaches of imagination




    Submitted on 2007-06-29 23:26:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Woah! Amazing! I love this piece to death.
    It will certainly be favorite, you can be assured. I love the way your words flow, and how you've managed to say so much in such a short poem. Its beautiful, really.
    I would say not to change anything, because I love it now.

    "Ride the waves of celestial bliss
    Forever to the wills of freedom"

    My very favorite lines in the whole poem. ^.^
    They provide meaning as well as some pretty imagery, which I've never seen anybody do before.

    "Loves grace to guide the heart
    To the fullest reaches of imagination"

    The most perfect ending I could ever imagine.

    Awesome, awesome poem

    ~Jazzy



    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by Jazzy | [ Reply to This ]


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