Journey

Author: Seraphim X Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 32 /41 /33 Words: 68

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Journey

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Forward across the untold stars None to hold us but our conviction Reach for the infinite in life’s possibility The fire with no fear but wind to fly Ride the waves of celestial bliss Forever to the wills of freedom The cosmos to embrace in eternity Loves grace to guide the heart To the fullest reaches of imagination

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=0000000 Woah! Amazing! I love this piece to death. It will certainly be favorite, you can be assured. I love the way your words flow, and how you've managed to say so much in such a short poem. Its beautiful, really. I would say not to change anything, because I love it now. "Ride the waves of celestial bliss Forever to the wills of freedom" My very favorite lines in the whole poem. ^.^ They provide meaning as well as some pretty imagery, which I've never seen anybody do before. "Loves grace to guide the heart To the fullest reaches of imagination" The most perfect ending I could ever imagine. Awesome, awesome poem ~Jazzy

| Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by Jazzy | [ Reply to This ]

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