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    dots Submission Name: let's play a game (invite the grim reper) dots

    Author: giovany164
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    dotslet's play a game (invite the grim reper) dots

    let's play a game of truth or dare,

    and see which one of us will be first to swear,

    to say "fuck you" or "i quit",

    and that'll be the end of it.

    than walk home alone and pretend we are strong,

    but we both know who is wrong.

    break down and cry,

    blown up with lies,

    a tear flees the face,

    we run home it's a race.

    get there and see our knifes,

    trying to end our own lives,

    only 11:15 and we got a minnet,

    to say how we feel, then we all quit,

    swallow those pills and in a haze,

    slit these wrist in a daze.

    we hold each other with bloody arms,

    now i raise the alarms.

    nock her out, drive to the hospital,

    she'll be saved but i still have a burial.

    in loving death i'll give you rest,

    just to show you your the best

    Submitted on 2007-06-30 01:20:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok just why did you knock her out and why did you have to die if you're the one that took her to the hospital?? they could've fixed you too! you need to watch your spelling. but other than that, i loved the start of it. weak ending, but that could be easily revised. good luck to ya!
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]

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