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    dots Submission Name: I'll think of something laterdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1232
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1536



    Description:
       I dunno what to say, I've not written the poem yet.
    I just feel like trying it out so I'm now gonna write it in this box

    So please forgive any spelling mistakes and my lousy grammar


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsI'll think of something laterdots
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    Circling softly beneath twilight
    Deepening, with each breath unbinding
    The night draws feathered wings, below
    to join the chorus, of the end.

    No angel this, nor bird of prey
    No demon cavorting, through the winds
    Have eyes yet born, upon such life
    They have told not, even through tales.

    Armageddon calls
    Judgement passes, this way
    Too long, this crumbling empire
    Has been privy to the ants.

    Ne'er shall you know who released the fury
    Nor shall you feel the coming wrath
    Swift shall plummet, both flame and needle
    Barbs to rend what battles ash.

    Eternity yet turned upon
    The earth below, an unborn sun
    Restricted in it's shining by
    The shell of life protected

    So soon, the feathers fall.
    Judgement passed upon the breed
    Cleansed of life a planet breathes

    No whisper, true, no wind.
    Becalmed, a warrior crashes through
    To take it's place within the stars

    Armageddon calls
    Judgement passes, this way
    Too long, this crumbling empire
    Had been privy to the ants.

    The Earth now stands aloft.
    A newborn in an ageless dark
    Seeing clearly for the first time
    Wish the veil of flesh undone.

    Armageddon called
    Judgement passed the lesser whole
    What was once a crumbling empire
    Takes its waiting throne




    Submitted on 2007-06-30 01:50:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Heaven help me but I did enjoy this read. You captured so many images in this piece and made each and every one of them stand on its own merit. Like the previous reviewer stated, i could never come up with something like this but then we all go in our own directions.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      You always seem to write what I imagine but can never put into words myself. You bring the feelings for each poem (or lack of feelings in this poem) to life even if you have not experienced them yourself. I like this piece and am very impressed that you just wrote this straight off,a talent I have not yet to master fully. I am so proud of you for trying to write again also and hope to read lots more.
    PS I feel so terrible about commenting!

    COMMENT HIM READERS!!!
    | Posted on 2007-07-02 00:00:00 | by tOXIC_wAST3 | [ Reply to This ]


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