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    dots Submission Name: Lotus Moondots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsLotus Moondots

    Lotus Moon
    Lovers embrace
    Pale moon face

    Lotus Moon
    Day is breaking
    gone to soon
    is Night

    Lotus Moon
    of the
    Now the
    has come
    to play

    Lotus Moon
    Moon Stone
    flowing free
    tell me what
    I'm meant
    to be...

    Submitted on 2007-06-30 02:30:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A Dreamy and rare idea,

    The title is the most attractive......

    Nice write...... portraying the beauty and loveliness in nature
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Tif, this was delightful! I'll be back to read more of your poetry later! The Lotus Moon! A supreme light for lovers!
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Tif,

    I like how you end on a theme asking the question that really matters.

    Lotus Moon
    Moon Stone
    flowing free
    tell me what
    I'm meant
    to be...

    And while we're not hapless followers in a pawn's game,
    the moon really does shape and reflect the beauty the Goddess gives us in every moment. Beautiful write Tif, thanks for sharing.

    much love,

    | Posted on 2007-07-15 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a mystical feeling invested in beauties of nature...
    These expressions:

    make the atmosphere surreal, haunted by something indescribable... but the day takes over too soon... this is the merit of a good poem that leaves the reader yearning for more.

    Nice work,
    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      A couple grammar issues and I don't mean your made up words; I liked those.
    Lover's embrace "gone to soon" to=too
    I like this poem for the type it is. When doing one of these free association poems one faces the danger of losing rhythm or being incohesive. You pull this style off quite well however with your cleverly created words and the rhythmic curve from one verse to next reflects perfection. au revoir
    | Posted on 2007-07-03 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      We are what we are, and what we are meant to be.

    Nice write Moonbeam.

    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This had a haiku feel without the meter. The imagery kept a solitary focus for the reader, which I thought made the piece sing.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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