"The Green Hills of Scotland" by Ron Cole

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Author:	Ron Cole
Elite Ratio:	3.77 - 1662/1118/181
Words:	106

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
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Average Vote:	5.0000
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I'm not from Scotland, but this was written for a dear friend who is! I've noticed that many of you are from Scotland also, so I thought I would post this here for all of you who love and long for "the green hills"!

"The Green Hills of Scotland" dots

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My heart has heavy grown;
my mind is far away!
I struggle just to breathe the air,
and make it through the day!

If only I could, for awhile,
be carried far away,
to the green hills of my Scotland,
for the morrow and a day!

I could see the Heather
in the Moors,
and breathe the bright, fresh air,
blown freshly from an
Emerald Sea,
Oh carry me back there!

I'll watch the Mist rise
in the Dell,
and smell the Heather's scent;
back to the Hills of Scotland,
I'm bound and Heaven sent!

Ron Cole
April 2007

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  I loved this Ron! Your writing always amazes me Ron. My family is Irish so I know the feeling quite well. Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  This is amazing, I'm going to Scotland in a few months, I really hope its as beautiful as your poem. The imagery brought me right there to those green hills, emerald sea and the heather. Keep on writing, I like your work very much.

-Jordynn
| Posted on 2007-08-31 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ]
  Although I have never been to Scotland you took me there through your words...I believe you captured the essence of Sctoland in your poem....

What a beautiful journey you took me on through this poem....Your piece made me wish I was there now...Nice flow all the way through and I could picture everything from the image you gave with your stanaza's....
I really enjoyed reading this what an uplifting feeling you gave me from the read thankYou Ron well done....

| Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm going to Scotland in the fall and I can't wait - this piece, as most of yours, rhymes and flows in a nice easy manner.

I believe you captured the feeling of escaping to a magical place - I'll let you know when I'm running the green hills - how it is!

Happy Day!

love,peace,joy&smiles to share

tif
| Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Scotland is beautiful in the summertime and among my favorite places to visit! Thank you for taking me along today if only for a brief visit through your lovely poem. :-) Sharon
| Posted on 2007-07-15 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  This is lovely as ever... very nice description of nostalgia and restlessness associated with it... Very imaginative and creative work... You always describe nature beautifully .... along with that i liked the realistic description of desire too.

Charming work on the whole.
| Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice one Ron. You certainly captured the essence of the bonnie land. And thanks for the dedication to all us Scots.

Frank.
| Posted on 2007-07-04 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Ron, I have never personally been to Scotland but the reading of this lovely piece surely makes me wish i could make that sojourn with you. You work is so bright and friendly that I find myself coming back for more and more.
| Posted on 2007-07-04 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
  for the most part i enjoyed this piece though i got tripped up somewhere between the end of the second stanza and the start of the third. there seems to be a change in pace/rhythm that threw me and i couldnt regain what i had through the first two stanzas.

just something to be aware of i guess.

ive not been to scotland though i have scottish heritage [as most people in my town do lol... my town is called Dunedin - the new edinburgh]

i like the idea that this piece is a kind of escape. everyone has some idea of a "happy place" where they can take themselves to, be it physically or mentally or emotionally or spiritually when things get too much and they need to regroup for the next attack...

and this is beautiful... you recreate the green hills and the air... its the air that im captivated by in this piece... it really does strike me as easier to breathe... i guess theres less polutants out in the country and thats why dancing over rolling green pastures is always much more pleasurable than running through smoggy streets...

id almost suggest dropping the rhyme of this piece but i think that is part of what makes this piece seem so light and pleasant...

good work.
| Posted on 2007-07-03 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, this IS neat and nifty...highly lyrical piece of poetry (I think perhaps "heather", "dell" and "moors" need not be capitolized) an excellent poem... bravo... bravo ... bravo ... michael
| Posted on 2007-07-03 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ron, you know how much i love this one!!
it's perfect...and does make me long to return to those green hills.
this is a beautiful piece...i simply adore it!!!

'I could see the Heather
in the Moors,
and breathe the bright, fresh air,
blown freshly from an
Emerald Sea,
Oh carry me back there!'

this part especially is stunning.
awesome stuff! another fav!
Michelle xxxx
| Posted on 2007-07-02 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this peom. When I read it I actually thought you were the one originally from Scotland. It's nice and cute, makes me want to pack my things and go there to. But for the last part:

"I'm bound and Heaven sent!"

could it be: "I'm bound it's Heaven sent!" because if you say "...and heaven sent!" it sounds like, you, were heaven sent not the place. Well I don't know, maybe that's what you wanted. Good work.
| Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]

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