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    dots Submission Name: the end of everythingdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 710
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       i dont want to tell you guys that im serious, but i am. and i dont want you guys to worry. because im gonna be okay where i go. ive only been depressed like this once before about 4 years ago... but this is so much worse. im sorry to leave you guys but i have to. i dont want to cry anymore. i dont want to hurt like this


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    this is the end of everything
    i cant deal with it anymore
    i choosing to leave
    im opening another door
    hopefully to the gates of hevean
    but it may be my leap to hell
    i havent got there yet
    so its kind of hard to tell.
    i think it could be hevean
    im not guilty in my soul
    maybe ill just burn
    because my hearts no long whole
    its a sin to take a life
    but is it wrong to set them free?
    this is what im doing
    and im doing it for me
    what if its your own?
    what if mine's the life that gone?
    is it still a sin to die?
    i dont think it would be wrong
    i used to live for love
    but my Love is not here
    and i think he's going further
    and im sick of all these tears
    so im dying sometime soon
    cuz there's nothing left to gain
    this is not just another poem
    its the end of all my pain




    Submitted on 2007-06-30 14:24:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem disgusted me. If you need help go get it. Don't right a poem about your future suicide and then do it. Do you want to tramatize people? I don't have words to describe what I want to say. If you need help you can talk to someone, you can talk to me. I won't judge you...
    Ha, but your a fool. Even though your having a tough time right now you know it will go away. It has before. You don't just give up. I suffered from depression and I knew I hit my lowest, I wanted to die. but as you see I'm still alive. So don't do this to yourself. You'll regret it.
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]


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