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    dots Submission Name: fallingdots
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    Author: sugar_sweet
    ASL Info:    20/ Female/ Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 11/8/15
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsfallingdots
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    bruised and broken
    She takes her final steps
    quickly she takes flight
    but only for a moment
    Falling faster and faster
    Into oblivion
    Will she reach the end?
    Will she live again?
    this tortured soul
    ending its journey
    wind running through her hair
    eyes closed
    she breaths her final sigh
    destined to find peace at last




    Submitted on 2007-06-30 15:20:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      if only it were that easy....
    another great poem keep it up
    | Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]


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