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    dots Submission Name: Eyes of angerdots
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    Author: EternallyMystic
    ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
    Elite Ratio:    2.05 - 9/18/25
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsEyes of angerdots
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    There she is with angry eyes
    and here she goes again with all the lies
    what no one knows im glad to admit
    that when shes alone she cries and sits
    she tightly shuts her eyes, she tears out her hair
    vowing to herself she will never care
    she bites down hard on her lips
    they are red as blood from so many poisoned sips
    she thought if it was easy she should drink it up
    finally she realized it was a shallow cup
    she hates herself so much now
    she will not forgive herself, no way, no how
    she cannot look at herself in the mirror
    she knows she has changed, but she will not falter
    she curses the day that she once again knows joy
    to her happiness is only there to annoy
    who is this girl, who carries such strife?
    what kind of demon has taken her life?
    It is i... truly me, this is who i am
    because i let myself feel love, now i am damned
    here i come with angry eyes
    this is where i begin telling all the lies..
    lies to hide all that i feel
    lies to hide what is real




    Submitted on 2007-06-30 16:15:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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