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Author: EternallyMystic
ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
Elite Ratio:    2.05 - 9 /18 /25
Words: 121
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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The world is like an open door

But I can’t reach it anymore

I’m standing right in front of it

Without the will.. this is my pit

I’ve lost my fight… though someone bright

Is calling me on the other side

He’s been through this, I know he did

Something stopped him, he’s not scared

I know he’s coming after me

He knows this place, but I can’t see..

He’s just like me, he has the right

He’s coming to the otherside

My heart is empty, there is no pride

Shut your mouth you’ve got no right

It’s still dark… on the otherside

Submitted on 2007-06-30 16:34:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this poem. It is very in depth of what you are saying. It definatly reminds of the days that I have when I am down and can't seem to get back up. I really like the part where you say: "Without the will.. this is my pit"
| Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by pyrosweetheart | [ Reply to This ]

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