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    dots Submission Name: alonedots
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    Author: EternallyMystic
    ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
    Elite Ratio:    2.05 - 9/18/25
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsalonedots
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    The world is like an open door

    But I canít reach it anymore

    Iím standing right in front of it

    Without the will.. this is my pit

    Iíve lost my fightÖ though someone bright

    Is calling me on the other side



    Heís been through this, I know he did

    Something stopped him, heís not scared

    I know heís coming after me

    He knows this place, but I canít see..

    Heís just like me, he has the right

    Heís coming to the otherside



    My heart is empty, there is no pride

    Shut your mouth youíve got no right

    Itís still darkÖ on the otherside




    Submitted on 2007-06-30 16:34:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem. It is very in depth of what you are saying. It definatly reminds of the days that I have when I am down and can't seem to get back up. I really like the part where you say: "Without the will.. this is my pit"
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by pyrosweetheart | [ Reply to This ]


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