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Welcome to hell would you like to come in? Step over the threshold and let the journey begin The first thing you do is take a step back Because hell makes no sense and guidance is slack So you wander around in a place filled with screams From the terror that finds it's way into your dreams There is no escape from this place,you know You can fight all you want but hell won't let go You'll look for a light but find that there's none And you can never undo the damage you've done So you sell your soul in exchange for a deal But in hell, deals break and there is no appeal The peace you were promised never enters your mind And the end to your nightmares you're never to find If this sounds like a place that you'd like to be Take hold of my hand and come there with me But first, I must warn you of that which you'll lose So listen carefully before you choose Your soul is the first thing to go then your heart And your sanity then from you will depart Then you're lost and you're lonely not knowing your needs And it's from this confusion that pure evil feeds So you sink even lower inside of this place And you put on a mask to cover your face So that nobody knows the pain that you hide And nobody knows the place you reside And this I can tell you with certainty Your soul will be lost at eternity's cost |
well you see it was and then again at the same time it wasn't deliberate, you see when i write poems they just flow out i don't always think about them or analyze them but there just there if you understand what im trying to say, lol, by the way i like your writing to and thanks for the comment| Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by EternallyMystic | [ Reply to This ] | That was great. The imagery in it is powerful and it seems like a place I already know. I especially love the stanza: | The peace you were promised never enters your mind And the end to your nightmares you're never to find Although one query is: with the last stanza, you break the rhyming scheme you seem to have worked so hard to keep to in the rest of the poem. Is that deliberate? And if so, What is its intended effect? DBE | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by DBE | [ Reply to This ] | |