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hell, welcome to my world


Author: EternallyMystic
ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
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Words: 294
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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hell, welcome to my world



Welcome to hell
would you like to come in?
Step over the threshold
and let the journey begin

The first thing you do
is take a step back
Because hell makes no sense
and guidance is slack

So you wander around
in a place filled with screams
From the terror that finds it's way
into your dreams


There is no escape
from this place,you know
You can fight all you want
but hell won't let go

You'll look for a light
but find that there's none
And you can never undo
the damage you've done

So you sell your soul
in exchange for a deal
But in hell, deals break
and there is no appeal

The peace you were promised
never enters your mind
And the end to your nightmares
you're never to find

If this sounds like a place
that you'd like to be
Take hold of my hand
and come there with me

But first, I must warn you
of that which you'll lose
So listen carefully
before you choose

Your soul is the first thing to go
then your heart
And your sanity then
from you will depart

Then you're lost and you're lonely
not knowing your needs
And it's from this confusion
that pure evil feeds

So you sink even lower
inside of this place
And you put on a mask
to cover your face

So that nobody knows
the pain that you hide
And nobody knows
the place you reside

And this I can tell you
with certainty
Your soul will be lost
at eternity's cost




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  well you see it was and then again at the same time it wasn't deliberate, you see when i write poems they just flow out i don't always think about them or analyze them but there just there if you understand what im trying to say, lol, by the way i like your writing to and thanks for the comment
| Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by EternallyMystic | [ Reply to This ]
  That was great. The imagery in it is powerful and it seems like a place I already know. I especially love the stanza:

The peace you were promised
never enters your mind
And the end to your nightmares
you're never to find

Although one query is: with the last stanza, you break the rhyming scheme you seem to have worked so hard to keep to in the rest of the poem. Is that deliberate? And if so, What is its intended effect?

DBE
| Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by DBE | [ Reply to This ]


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