well you see it was and then again at the same time it wasn't deliberate, you see when i write poems they just flow out i don't always think about them or analyze them but there just there if you understand what im trying to say, lol, by the way i like your writing to and thanks for the comment
That was great. The imagery in it is powerful and it seems like a place I already know. I especially love the stanza:
The peace you were promised
never enters your mind
And the end to your nightmares
you're never to find
Although one query is: with the last stanza, you break the rhyming scheme you seem to have worked so hard to keep to in the rest of the poem. Is that deliberate? And if so, What is its intended effect?