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    Author: EternallyMystic
    ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
    Elite Ratio:    2.05 - 9/18/25
    Words: 360
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Can I find it in my heart to forgive
    Each day fighting with breaking down
    I try so hard to forget your ways
    They haunt me when I sleep
    I do not want to be afraid
    But inside Im dying from what you did
    You took a piece from me my love
    and I don't see you returning it anytime
    soon

    They say revenge is not for us to decide
    But if you died tonight I would not shed a tear
    Anguised by the misery you caused
    I toss and turn in my bed
    Ready to explode , but I remain calm
    Please I rather love you then hate you
    But I cannot control my fury you caused
    And knowing my situation is unfixable
    You have left me so helpless

    I lay here cut by your sword
    Crippled with anger , I wish you could see
    me while I lay on my death bed
    But you ran away to afraid to look back
    Knowing you would crumble from your mistake
    You bury your pain by destroying another
    so you leave me breathless and run away
    Im tired and my time is short

    I only look to the sky in hopes
    that one day , one day soon you will see
    what you did to me was not forgotten
    And that someone above was looking down
    Your time will come but I won't be around
    For its time I move on
    And thanks to you I shed my last tear
    Because never again will I feel this pain
    Of a twisting sword in my heart

    "Beautiful , Beautiful stars above
    Do not forget me, do not let me go forgotten
    And at night when he sleeps
    Let the pain he brought me drench him in sweat
    if happiness never finds him again
    that is sweeter then any womb he ever gave
    That truly is greater then any pain I give"

    Relief at last I breathe my last breath
    Im cut, but cut by the grace of revenge
    and no sooner have I drifted away
    will I look over to see him laying by my side




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