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    dots Submission Name: Alienationdots
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    Author: ImperfectGirl1
    ASL Info:    19 f USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 33/57/33
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 740
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 502



    Description:
       As I state at the top of the poem: This is an older poem of mine, but I wanted to share it just the same. Please be honest..THANKS!


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    dotsAlienationdots
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    (This is an older poem of mine, but I wanted to share it anyway)

    She feels alone
    In a world of her own
    Around them she doesn't exist
    Compared to theri bonds
    And thier little jokes and clicks
    She doesn't measure up
    To all her "friends"
    She feels the agnst
    She feels almost ignored
    She feels as though she wasn't given
    A chance
    To prove herself to them
    She feels the alienation.




    Submitted on 2007-06-30 17:43:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Pretty good. The flow was fine but i feel you could have been a little more creative but still at the same time i like the simplicity of it. nice write.
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]


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