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    dots Submission Name: I Didn't Cry(another version)dots
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    Author: ImperfectGirl1
    ASL Info:    19 f USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 33/57/33
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 802
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    Description:
       This is the same poem/it has the same meaning that the first version had. It is only a little different, it takes some lines out here and there.


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    dotsI Didn't Cry(another version)dots
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    (referring to Grandpa Groomes, God rest his soul)

    I didn't cry,
    i watched his pain,
    i saw him go,
    I said my goodbye,
    but i couldn't cry.

    I saw his body,
    I saw how peaceful,
    I saw the cross in his hands.

    I saw him three nights,
    I saw him just there,
    I prayed by his casket,
    but I couldn't cry.

    I watched them
    as they carried him in,
    there he laid in front of all.

    He was a very religious man,
    I read a Bible verse,
    it was one of his favorites.

    I watched the service,
    I watched the blessing,
    I watched her cry,
    but I couldn't cry.

    I saw all the cars,
    we were on our way
    to the graveyard up ahead.

    I saw the priest speak,
    I saw them lower him,
    I watched them leave.

    I sat at the table,
    I said my goodbyes,
    I went home,
    and then I cried.




    Submitted on 2007-06-30 18:35:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this was really beautiful and sad. I'm sorry he passed away its hard to lose someone you love and that your close to. I hope you find peace.
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]


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