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    dots Submission Name: Bee esSdots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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       ~and who will embrace the sublime fire tonight?~

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    dotsBee esSdots

    drunk again?

    her true calling

    can't sing, can't dance, can't act

    a triple threat

    no doubt

    no talent

    no soul, no skill, no sensitivity

    but she's a star...

    of nothing

    what do you call the people
    who grovel, convening like cattle
    to discuss their disease;
    searing their souls
    in her divine light? fans?


    Submitted on 2007-06-30 21:40:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok.... by show of hands... who..... doesnt have anything to say about paris hilton?

    i rest my case.

    although it is possible to interpret the uncanny resemblance to a certain cock-sucker... i dont think this was ever your point. or is it?

    a lot of time has been wasted pondering the Bee esS in life and in everything on my part, sacrificing my youth and innocence until spiraling into that dark and lonely road of cynicism.

    but i shall suffer no more! no matter how casual i seem to care about the Bee esS around me, it still strikes a nerve, but no more! henceforth, i hypothesize, that we, as humans need supplementary Bee esS in order to survive. after all, what is truth without Bee esS (ok, thats the last time ill use that spelling here.) as earnestly, and as instinctual we seek the truth, we also seek that other thing.

    simplistic as it sounds, truth is nothing without........ that thing that is the opposite of truth. the mere fact that this specific dichotomy exists already makes you question the make up of the cosmos.

    is it even a dichotomy?


    anyway, cool write.

    | Posted on 2007-07-17 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh i've read this before. Only now do I read the comments and think "maybe someone should put more thought into their interpretation... or read more than the first two lines"

    One night stand? I just don't see it. This is why this place is dying.

    Paris Hilton does come to mind, but only as the current example of someone placed above all of us by the media as a "celebrity..." whose only claim to fame is wealth, decadence and waste... bourgeois pigs.

    I have to wonder why so many people pay attention to them. Just don't have anything important to say? I don't want to talk about Paris Hilton or her ilk.

    you've hit on something with the fans gathering "to discuss their disease..."
    they share something in common, that's why their transfixed by this "star." Cause she's got nothing and people tell her she's everything? Cause there's no difference between one and the other except wealth and publicity, and they want people to pay attention to them that desperately? Cause they're living vicariously?

    As to your actual poem- very clever title, with the b. s. and the bees. Wouldn't change a thing.

    The first voice, the "out loud" voice, says something, and the second makes a tounge-in-cheek remark,

    but then the second one, like the subconcious, says, "but she's a star..." like it's been ingrained on there. the last failing attempt to make what you see and what you've been told mesh, or maybe to just hope you haven't been fed a bunch of bees.
    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      Stars are about as biological as we are, they have a life span, they have a chemical composition, many scientists will tell you we our selves reduced to our own most elemental form are not much more than hydrogen, so short of a breath and brain function yes yes indeed we are all stars, only we, as in people are far more destructive, not happy enough with our expanse, unlike a star silently expanding. "What do you call people convening like cattle to discuss their disease; searing their souls", in any light?
    Group therapy, that divine light could be the counselor/s I would guess….. Or of coarse I suppose you could be talking of starlets with dim wits and blonde hair as the stereo type put them…. Do you know what the attraction toward blondes really is? Well. It’s because young ladies more often than not start out blonde but their hair tends to darken with age, yes medical fact for the majority, most will say I‘m blonde I’m blond, and yes at some point they were but thanks to hair dye they still are but would otherwise not be…. But any way the attraction is a biological recognition that a blonde usually signifies a young age, therefore child baring is more likely, all in order… It’s true.
    Sorry I just messed up all over you comments section with my garble, but I cant see how mine is to much worse than the next persons.

    And lets hope Elite Skills Live
    | Posted on 2007-07-08 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very true write that in my opinion describes a one night stand perfectly
    It seems to many guys or gals just want instant satisfaction instead of a lasting relationship
    This write definately made me think
    Great Job
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
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    | Posted on 2007-07-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, this made me think of my "party-girl" ex-wife, not just hollow starlets. I liked this very much. Simple, with a profound meaning. That's very cool. I'm unworthy of criticizing, but, I'm a new fan, so, I just won't lose the way to your page.
    | Posted on 2007-07-06 00:00:00 | by carcasstender | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Bill,

    Why are we so fascinating with the stars of nothingness? The beauty with no brains fact remains still so true in our society and we are still so drowned in the fascination of absolutely nothing. Why couldn't we be interested in people who actually do make a difference and give interviews for people who do make sense.

    I can tell you one thing for i am one of those people who are so fascinated with nothing. You're just waiting to see what next disaster they might do and how they will get out of it. The truth is, we love disasters and we love drama. Surprisingly, we have less interest in other things. How stupid of me (of us) to see such a simple picture.

    By the way, i was thinking of Lindsay Lohan or however her name is spelt. No offense for whoever is a fan.


    | Posted on 2007-07-03 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      When I read this it brought a few "Stars" to mind, it's odd how they tend to place themselves above others, and yet still make the same mistakes as we, the "ordinary people" do.

    But when they do fall the public seems to feed off of it, it brings them down to our level, reminds us that they are no better, they only have thier lives by chance. And in a way that makes us feel better about ourselves.

    That said, I like this, I like the feel, to me it was like reading a script where the first voice would be just comentary and the second the painful voice of truth, the one that nags us and brings us back to earth when are heads get just a little to high.
    | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by Olivia Jade | [ Reply to This ]
      "This world, I am afraid, is designed for crashing bores."

    says Morrissey and though he may be being slightly hyperbolic, large sections of our modern world are certainly numbed and enthralled in the cult of the utterly tedious and sexy-as-a-mannequin celebrity. A cult in which culture is like chewing gum; throw-away and never digested.

    It's really easy to get angry and frustrated about cheap celebrity, especially as the attention means that so many more important issues are brushed aside - but there is hope. For example, earlier today I read in the paper of a newsreporter in the US who refused to read the story about Paris Hilton that was top of the news and instead of getting fired seems to be receiving quite a bit of admiration. It's a one-off, but thankfully shows that such sentiments as yours are far from unique.

    And perhaps one day substance will be the new in-thing. Or maybe I'm just being slightly utopian...
    | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by Icarus | [ Reply to This ]
    BS indeed. [i must confess the first time i read your title i added a letter and thought you were saying goodbye and i was close to distraught]

    this really could be about paris hilton.
    little miss 'i have a rich grandad and a dog in a bag' lol.

    i like how you have worked this.
    the way you have so few words but it reads as long as the prose i have been absorbing from you lately...

    i am attracted to the alternate voices thing.
    i guess what you have been doing with italics i do with parenthesis to a degree... perhaps thats why it appeals to me so much and yet... while mine is on a subtle level yours is more blunt which creates a different effect.

    i am glad i am not she you speak of!
    thats for sure!
    so... scathing in some ways... honest in all...
    | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Bill,

    Ok I think the star is Paris Hilton and the enablers are the paparazzi and media. But I posted a poem about her a few days ago, so maybe I am one of them, too! Yikes! But if I'm one, you're one. Unless this isn't about Paris at all and I don't know what I'm talking about.

    Love your title and the alliteration in the last few lines. It's good to see some poetry from you again. I like your prose very much, but your poetry seems to have more of a bite to it, which is always fun or funny or refreshing. (Or maybe it's just that I'm just a lazy reader and the poems are shorter.)

    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]

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