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    dots Submission Name: Unsaid Things (Tom Fletcher)dots
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    Author: Lord Bane
    ASL Info:    24/M/Isle of Wight, UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 40/81/50
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 730
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1116



    Description:
       Written when he was still only 16, this song is about a girl who he wants to tell her he likes, but is about to get married...e. typical teenage lad thing. This reminds me of my ex, partly why I posted this.


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    dotsUnsaid Things (Tom Fletcher)dots
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    This girl that moved just up the road from me
    She had the nicest legs I'd ever seen
    Back then, she wrote me letters just to say she loved me
    But now her face is just a memory
    Now that seven years have gone and I've grown up but she's moved on
    And somehow I'm still holding on to her

    Chorus
    I've still got so many unsaid things that I wanna say
    And I just can't wait another day, I wish she knew
    That I still wait up wondering if she will remember me
    But there's no way for me to know

    Now she's got pregnant with her baby
    It feels like she's slipping away from me
    Now that she's getting married I'm in misery,
    Cos her fiance's so much bigger than me
    Cos he works out a lot, and there's not much that he ain't got
    And right now I'm losing the plot, along with her

    Chorus

    And I want her to know, before she's married and has her baby, that I need her

    Chorus till end




    Submitted on 2007-07-01 05:20:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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